Re: Postfest: The Seeker's Library- 1001 Uses for Wari Tape typos

I ave a few entries, just need to dig them up...
Loki

On 1/6/07, Paul Westermeyer <westermeyer@????????.net> wrote:
> When the postfest is complete and the entries are all compiled for
posting to the list and on Beyond the Moons it's Blackmaer's name that
will be listed as author of his book.  So, I'll only make changes to the
original entry if Blackmaer posts them.  It's the only intellectually
honest way.
>
>
> >I really laughed at this book. It is great. It brings the Tinker Gnomes to life. Well done!
> >
> >There are however a few small errors in the text that need fixing.
Plus I have a couple of comment and questions. But this aside, I really
love your work and hope you can find more time to post.
> >
> >From: "Blackmaer" <cslundy@?????????.net>
> >Sent: Wednesday, January 03, 2007 7:32 PM
> >
> >[multiple snips have been applied to this text - refer to the original for more info]
> >
> >>Title: "1001 Uses for Wari Tape"
> >>
> >>Author: Dugandorf Dickerstien,
> >
> >Comment: That name doesn't look very Gnomish as it follows the Human
- forename surname pattern. It might be better if "Dugandorf" was the
name that non-Gnomes gave to him and "Dugandorfdickerstein" was just the
first few syllables of his short Gnomish name. Opinions aside, I'll move
onto the typos.
> >
> >Typo 1: You seem to have edited this sentence and left in the word "the" when it no longer fits.
> >
> >>If the cover is unwrapped, it will be discovered that the it is
> >>made entirely of this substance.
> >
> >I suggest this is changed to "If the cover is unwrapped, it will be
discovered that it is made entirely of this substance."
> >
> >Typo 2: There are no capital letters (or spaces) in the middle of
crystal sphere names*. Crystal sphere names should be compound nouns
with one capital letter at the beginning. (The exception to this rule,
which doesn't apply in this case, are descriptive names like "The
Astromundi Cluster", "The Broken Sphere" or "The Crimson Sphere")
> >
> >>This Alchemetic procedure includes
> >>boiling down a rare plant leaf only found on Chislev in KrynnSpace and the
> >>aquisition of a live Adherer.
> >
> >This sphere should be called "Krynnspace".
> >
> >Typo 3?: My (English) spelling checker says that "aquisition" is
spelt incorrectly. I've got no idea how this is spelt in US English so
suggest an American double checks this (and all submissions from non-US
residents).
> >
> >>The downside, which is mentioned later in item number 983, Wari Tape is
> >>highly flammable and therefore would make great kindling.  I Crit Hit of
> >>Fire on a ship patched up with Wari tape would be a bad thing.
> >
> >Typo 4: I suggest you change "I Crit Hit of Fire" to "One critical
hit of fire" or "One critical hit that causes fire". It looks better. It
might be useful to give us stats for the amount of fire damage. I
realise that the size of the hole would be variable, but perhaps you
could assume all holes to be of equal size (to simplify things) and then
have Wari tape create a fireball of a size of your choice if a ship
catches fire.
> >
> >Question: Given that the entire cover and the material binding the
pages together are both made from Wari tape I assume that the book
itself is also highly flammable. It might be worth working out saving
throws for the book vs. fire (I'd guess none) and the amount of fire it
would create both in wildspace and the Phlogiston. I'd guess that this
would burn violently (but otherwise normally) in wildspace and explode
as if it was a fireball (of a size chosen by you) if it caught fire in
the flow. Although you could decide that this book always explodes when
exposed to fire.
> >
> >* = This is my SJ rant number 3 (My other rants include, rant number
1 - "there is *no* capital 'J' in the middle of Spelljammer" and rant
number 2 - "Spelljammer is a fantasy space setting *not* a sci-fi one".
I may publish "my top ten rants" sometime. :-D )
> >
> >David "Big Mac" Shepheard
> >Virtual Eclipse Role Playing Club
>
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