Re: Lionheart: The Unseen Saboteur, part 2

daniel brough wrote:

> A couple of weeks ago I posted the first part to my novelette set on
> Lionheart (based on the excellent reference work that Night Druid created on
> that station)  Stylistically I've been told this work is a little like 'A
> Few Good Men', 'Crimson Tide', or 'Courage Under Fire', so that will give
> you some idea of what you're stepping into.  Anyway, it ended up going a
> little longer than I expected, but I did manage to finish the rest of it in
> one more part.  

	:)  Good work.  Kept me guessing for a while; again, a very good piece
of literature:)  Must admit, I spent an hour this morning reading it
when I should have been studying...;) (don't worry, I think I did ok:) 
The end did surprise me a bit; I wasn't expecting the no-winner
conspiracy that you presented:)  That also goes a long way as to
explaining why Seljuril didn't act; it wasn't her progative to do so:) 
Another thing that struck me was the wonderful way you presented both
sides of the "issue" (the scro peace treaty).  While I *doubt* a split
in the military ranks would be *too* much of a problem (it hasn't
happened with our military, who don't happen to like the joker we have
in office now), the problem of a split in the Council would definately
weigh heavily on the conspirator's minds.  I could easily see a split
happening the way you laid out:)
> 
> Anyway, I hope you enjoy and please let me know what you think.  (Especially
> Night Druid, if you see anything that doesn't match up with the Lionheart
> you think doesn't quite match up)
> 
	Not really.  Looks pretty good.  The only things that struck me as a
bit odd was Admiral Lylanna's attitude at the end; it seemed a
bit...bitter?  Yet, in retrospect, it was probably the way she *should*
have acted; she had a no-win situation in front of her.  Her only choice
was to cover it up; a very hard decision for anyone.  Overall, a nice
solid ending to a great story:)
-- 
Night Druid